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@@ -74,20 +74,18 @@ facing with courage her grief and her own inevitable death. Even a talented
 writer such as Foster, intentionally seeking to break new imaginative ground for
 conceptualising green crises, seems unable to escape the motif of catastrophe.
 
-The word 'apocalypse' is sometimes used as if to stand for 'catastrophe.'
-Of course, the Apocalypse of John has a great deal in common with the concept
-of a geological catastrophe. Cosmos-scale world-changing events destroy much of
-the existing world order and its life-sustaining powers: the heavens are
-rolled up like a scroll, the sun and moon are darkened, water turns to blood,
-fire rains down from above. In its place, a new world order is established,
-supporting different forms of life. Al Gore, in his influential global
-warming campaign film, _An Inconvenient Truth_, was (and remains) typical in the
-way he describes the consequences of certain floods and wildfires as 'like a
-nature hike through the Book of Revelations' [@inconvenient-truth]. In the next
-chapter, I will argue that reducing apocalypse to mere catastrophe misses out
-important features of apocalyptic language as exemplified by John, but for
-now it is worth noting that some rhetors use allusions to the Apocalypse in order
-to function as a catastrophic symbol.
+The word 'apocalypse' is sometimes used as if to stand for 'catastrophe.' Of
+course, the vision recounted in the Apocalypse of John has a great deal in
+common with the concept of a geological catastrophe. Cosmos-scale world-changing
+events destroy the planet's existing life-supporting systems, and institute new
+ones in their place. Al Gore, in his influential global warming campaign film,
+_An Inconvenient Truth_, was (and remains) typical in the way he describes the
+consequences of certain floods and wildfires as 'like a nature hike through the
+Book of Revelations' [@inconvenient-truth]. In the next chapter, I will argue
+that reducing apocalypse to mere catastrophe misses out important features of
+apocalyptic language as exemplified by John, but for now it is worth noting that
+some rhetors use allusions to the Apocalypse in order to function as a
+catastrophic symbol.
 
 It has been claimed green catastrophism is fatalistic: that the catastrophe is
 implicitly inevitable, and therefore no solution a rhetor might propose can ever