log: tweak structure of new argument 2026-05-11

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 7. This has led some critics to blame apocalypticism for the failure of R
 8. This is a traditional criticism of apocalypticism 'from above'
 9. Apocalypse 'from below' has often worked very differently
-10. This difference is due to the different interests of the readers
-11. John's rhetoric exhorts his audience to a martyrdom ethic
-12. R needs to exhort their audiences to a martyrdom ethic
-13. Socialist rhetoric in the past has used apocalypticism for this very purpose
-14. Once rhetors addressing the PMC have fixed all the other problems with R,
+10. This difference is due to the different interests of the readers -- a
+    difference which does not apply in the case of green crises
+11. In fact, apocalypse can meet the critic's concerns in principle
+12. (In order to do so in practice, those with power need to attack the
+    structures which drive the downward spiral)
+13. John's rhetoric exhorts his audience to a martyrdom ethic
+14. R needs to exhort their audiences to a martyrdom ethic
+15. Socialist rhetoric in the past has used apocalypticism for this very purpose
+16. Once rhetors addressing the PMC have fixed all the other problems with R,
     they'll need this apocalyptic hope, too
 
 If I had to chop it up into chapters:
 
 1. (1-5) R is a failure
-2. (6-10) anti-apocalyptic criticism of R repeats traditional anti-apocalyptic
-   rhetoric, which is class-based and not fit for purpose
-3. (11-14) apocalyptic rhetoric is now needed for both the working class and the
-   PMC in order to motivate people to a martyrdom ethic
+2. (6-12) anti-apocalyptic criticism of R mis-diagnoses the problem
+3. (13-16) green rhetors need to use apocalyptic rhetoric
 
 What follows is the structure explored in more detail.