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@@ -14,7 +14,7 @@ word 'rhetoric' is often used to suggest empty or untrustworthy political
 speech, my sense is much broader than this. By 'rhetoric', I simply mean an
 utterance with an agenda. A speaker counts as a 'rhetor', and is producing
 'rhetoric', just when they are putting forth an utterance (or writing, or
-non-verbal communication) with the intention of causing their audience make
+non-verbal communication) with the intention of causing their audience to make
 something happen as a result of their utterance. 'Rhetoric' in this sense is a
 very broad category of language. A politician making a speech, of course, might
 count as a rhetor, but so might a military officer issuing an order, or a lover
@@ -23,42 +23,40 @@ tn?'
 
 By 'green', I am narrowing down that very broad category to specifically the
 political rhetoric belonging to a particular historical situation: the green
-movement[^1].
-
-[1]: We could use a range of epithets in the place of 'green': environmental,
-conservation, nature, wilding, re-wilding, climate, ecological, to name but a
-few. For the purposes of this dissertation, I will prefer the name 'green' to
-refer to this movement and the closely-related cluster of issues which these
-names represent.
+movement^[We could use a range of epithets in the place of 'green':
+'environmental,' 'conservation,' 'nature,' 'wilding,' 're-wilding,' 'climate,'
+'ecological,' to name but a few. For the purposes of this dissertation, I will
+prefer the name 'green' to refer to this movement and the closely-related
+cluster of issues which these names represent.].
 
 The green movement began in the 1960s. Major institutions rapidly gained mass
 membership, especially among the urban professional middle classes, in many
-Western nations. Rachel Carson's _Silent Spring_ helped to kick green rhetoric
-up to the highest level of politics in the US and other countries. Carson made
-use of well-established forms of language which distinguished between 'nature'
-and 'civilisation', and called on her audience to protect pristine nature from
-the clutches of corrupting civilisation. This kind of rhetoric proliferated, and
-in its wake followed wave upon wave of legislation.
+Western nations \[EVIDENCE\]. Rachel Carson's _Silent Spring_ helped to kick
+green rhetoric up to the highest level of politics in the US and other countries
+\[EVIDENCE\]. Carson made use of well-established forms of language which
+distinguished between 'nature' and 'civilisation', and called on her audience to
+protect pristine nature from the clutches of corrupting civilisation
+\[EVIDENCE\]. This kind of rhetoric proliferated, and in its wake followed wave
+upon wave of legislation \[EVIDENCE\].
 
 From the beginning, one of the central issues of the green movement was nuclear
-power.
-
-Throughout the 1960s, 1970s and 1980s, nuclear power functioned as the dominant
-'master frame' of the green movement, so that all other green issues tended to
-be framed in nuclear terms.
+power. Throughout the 1960s, 1970s and 1980s, nuclear power functioned as the
+dominant 'master frame' of the green movement, so that all other green issues
+tended to be framed in nuclear terms \[EVIDENCE\].
 
 At times, governments attempted to persuade their citizens that a nuclear war
-could be fought and won, even though they knew this wasn't true. Such rhetoric
-served to quell resistance to pro-nuclear policies, so those who opposed those
-policies attacked this narrative. To do this, rhetors invented terms such as
-'nuclear winter', 'nuclear holocaust', 'nuclear apocalypse', and 'nuclear
-Armageddon', while attempting to persuade their audiences that a nuclear war
-would bring about the end of the world, and must therefore be avoided at all
-costs.
+could be fought and won, even though they knew this wasn't true \[EVIDENCE\].
+Such rhetoric served to quell resistance to pro-nuclear policies, so those who
+opposed those policies attacked this narrative \[EVIDENCE\]. To do this, rhetors
+invented terms such as 'nuclear winter', 'nuclear holocaust', 'nuclear
+apocalypse', and 'nuclear Armageddon', while attempting to persuade their
+audiences that a nuclear war would bring about the end of the world, and must
+therefore be avoided at all costs \[EVIDENCE\].
 
 In the 1980s and 1990s, climate change moved in to take over the role of the
-green movement's master frame. However, the movement's nuclear heritage left an
-indelible impression on the way greens talked about climate change.
+green movement's master frame \[EVIDENCE\]. However, the movement's nuclear
+heritage left an indelible impression on the way greens talked about climate
+change \[EVIDENCE\].
 
 So, for the last three decades, the green movement has overwhelmingly framed
 climate change in terms of an impending catastrophe which would bring about the