chp1: abbrev and soften tone of comment on ngos attempting to mobilise

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@@ -326,8 +326,8 @@ human 'we,' but to the Western middle classes. This makes sense, since the
 green movement has historically been heavily dominated by large non-governmental
 organisations such as the RSPB, National Audubon Society, Friends of the Earth,
 Greenpeace, and WWF, to name but a few. Typically, such NGOs don't depend on
-grassroots mass mobilisation, and indeed, often struggle to mobilise their
-members on the rare occasions they try to do so. Their business model is one of
+grassroots mass mobilisation, and indeed, struggle to mobilise their
+members when they try. Their business model is one of
 raising funds from mass membership, even in more activist organisations like
 Greenpeace, which largely function as 'protest businesses' [@rootes-2012, pp.
 47-53]. Thus, these NGOs are dominated by the Western middle classes who provide